Sunday, November 8, 2009

the inteduction

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What makes people smokes ? what is the danger of somking ? how it can affect the person?. Smoking has became a serious problem people should consider, it has became more popular nowadays and people of all different ages are smoking , children are copying their parents or their Bad friends , they learn this bad habit instead of learning something useful , smoking indeed have many causes and effects that this essay will shows .

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1 comment:

  1. The structure is generally OK, but lots of language and punctuation errors:
    1) people smokes - SVA
    2) what - C
    3) somking - SP
    4) no space between punctuation mark and the word before it
    5) how - P
    6) how it can affect the person?. - Word order and P
    7) the person - # (only one smoker in the world?)
    8) has became - T
    9) Smoking .....will shows. This is one sentence. It should be many sentences
    10) it has became - T
    11) Bad - C
    12) indeed - delete this word
    13) many causes and effects - how many? be specific
    14) will shows - T

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